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20 February 2013 @ 08:31 pm
Hurt/Comfort Meme  
Because we all love torturing our characters, right?

Leave me a comment with a fandom, characters or pairing (platonic or un), and number from the list below. I will write you a short fic, excerpt of fic or description of fic.

The prompts are a bit vague, so feel free to be more specific about what sort of horridness has occurred, or severity of horridness, or which character you prefer the horridness to have happened to, or any other thing you want to add. I usually shy away from angst as much as possible, but, due to the nature of some of the prompts, there may be angst there. I will do my best to end on a happy, or at least hopeful, note.

All fandoms I've written for before are open. Feel free to request OCs or crossovers if you wish.

1. Injury
2. Illness
3. Grief
4. Loss of Sense (sight, hearing, etc.)
5. Sleep disturbance
6. Guilt
7. Exhaustion
aelfgyfu_mead: Due Southaelfgyfu_mead on February 21st, 2013 02:38 am (UTC)
I haven't read any Due South in ages! How about Due South with
first Ray (real Ray Vecchio)
Benton Fraser
#1 Injury
The Writer They Call Tayawanderingbard on February 23rd, 2013 01:05 am (UTC)
Eeek! I've never written Ray V before, and it's been awhile since I saw his episodes. Hope this is okay!

"Frannie, Fraser does not want you in here while he's getting ready for bed," Ray said. "Get lost." He shut the door in her face, and then opened it briefly again to add: "and tell Ma to stop feeding him!" He turned and shrugged to Fraser. "Sorry. They care. It's a curse."

"They've been very kind," Fraser said, politely. "Though, I really would be fine at home, Ray."

"You can barely walk, you aren't going to get up the eighty flights of stairs your apartment," Ray pointed out. "I barely made it when I went for your stuff, and I didn't fall out a window this morning."

"I could have very easily camped in the lobby," Fraser said.

"There is no lobby. There is an area temporarily cleared of junkies and thieves near the door," Ray said. "They smell blood, no telling what they'd do. You're better off here. You need help getting to bed?"

"I'm fine, thank you," Fraser said.

Dief, who was already curled up at the foot of the bed, made a skeptical noise.

"I didn't ask for your opinion," Fraser told him. "If you hadn't been distracted by that turkey, you could have apprehended the kidnapper yourself, and I wouldn't have been hurt. Think about that, hmm?"

Dief put his chin on his paws and looked unconcerned.

Ray could see Fraser was having trouble with his buttons, and sighed before going over to help him. The guy had a bunch of cracked ribs, a broken thumb, a sprained wrist and dozen cuts and bruises. It was painful to watch him move.

"One day, we're going to have a good long talk about doors and how useful they can be for exiting buildings," Ray said, as he helped Fraser out of his shirt. He grabbed the red longjohns Fraser has asked him to get from his apartment. "I cannot believe you sleep in this thing."

"It's very warm," Fraser said. He winced as he reached for his belt, but managed it on his own.

"You're in America now, we have central heating," Ray said.

Fraser got down to his boxer shorts, and reached for the longjohns. He made a sharp cry of pain. Ray winced in sympathy. "Perhaps it may be time for a change in attire," Fraser said.

"Smart move," Ray said.

He followed Fraser as he robot-walked his way over to the bed, ready to catch him if he fell. He was making weird Mountie noises--deep breaths, little clicks and a long hum.

"You know, they gave you painkillers," Ray said. "You could just take one."

"The Inuit survived for centuries without modern medicine," Fraser said. "I stayed with a woman once who taught me how to meditate through pain." He repeated the breathe-click-hum routine.

"Yeah, that's great," Ray said. "But I bet she would take the Tylenol-3s if they were offered."

Fraser got into bed. He took his hat off, and put it carefully on the nightstand. Ray helped him get the covers over himself. There was something about a Mountie without a hat that made him look very vulnerable.

"You've got water, painkillers, and a phone," Ray told him. "Call my cell if you need anything, I'll have it with me upstairs. Or just shout, Frannie's probably camping outside your door."

"Thank you very kindly, Ray," Fraser said, sleepily. "For all your help."

"No problem, Benny," Ray said.

Fraser drifted off almost immediately. Ray flicked the bedside lamp off, and headed for the door.

"Hey, watch him, okay?" he said to Dief.

The wolf stood up, turned in several circles, and then lay back down, his chin on Fraser's feet. Ray smiled.

"Good boy."

ETA: Ack! Sorry for the HTML fail!

Edited at 2013-02-23 01:06 am (UTC)
aelfgyfu_mead: brilliantaelfgyfu_mead on February 23rd, 2013 01:56 am (UTC)
I love it! The voices are just right! "eighty flights of stairs," "doors"; "The Inuit survived for centuries. . . ."

And of course Fran would be trying to get in there.

Thank you!
The Writer They Call Tay: MISC: Adam Hillsawanderingbard on February 23rd, 2013 02:04 am (UTC)
Oh, good! I'm glad it worked. My due South is a bit rusty. :-)
zee on February 21st, 2013 03:14 am (UTC)
I'll play! Let's see ... How about The Avengers, Tony, illness. Maybe he's hiding it from the team because there's an important mission, or else he honestly thinks he's okay until Jarvis alerts him to his temperature. Something acute, please, like the flu or poisoning or magic fever ray of doom. I'd love delirious!Tony in real danger, whether in-suit or out, and the team, or your favorite member of the team, coming to the rescue.
The Writer They Call Tay: IM: Tony Stark is awesomeawanderingbard on February 22nd, 2013 01:24 am (UTC)
Part the First
My short fics never end up as short as I want. Hope you enjoy, anyway! Some vomiting and IVs being put in. I hope you don't mind.

Foul Illnesses

Bruce woke up and, as was wont to happen, had no fucking clue where he was or what the fuck was happening. He had flashes of memory, surges of indescribable rage in pictures tinted red and green, and shouted, angry thoughts.


It looked like Hulk had. Shiny Metal Man was nearby, lying on his back in the middle of what looked like a forest. There were trees knocked over all around them--The Other Guys work, Bruce guessed. Bruce vaguely remembered something about Costa Rica, and that seemed to suit the terrain. He crawled over to Tony, tying the remnants of his pants around his waist to cover up a bit.

Tony looked to have crash landed. His suit was banged up, and his visor was completely gone, exposing his face. He looked relatively intact, however, except for the white pallor of his skin, and the sweat pouring out of him.

“Jarvis, you okay in there?” Bruce asked.

“I am operating at 86% capacity,” Jarvis replied, his voice echoing out of the inside of the helmet. “I do not have control of the thrusters.”

“I don't think we need them, don't worry about it,” Bruce said.

“I am not,” Jarvis replied, primly.

“What happened?” Bruce asked. His hands kept moving, instictively trying to examine Tony and futilely banging against the metal of his suit.

“Mr. Stark lost consciousness, and I was unable to stabilize him,” Jarvis reported.

Bruce put his hand to Tony's forehead, the only part of him he had access to. “God, he's burning up,” he said. “Can I get some vitals, please?”

Jarvis rattled off statistics about Tony's heart rate, respiratory rate, and temperature. They were all elevated, the first two within acceptable ranges, the last to an alarming degree. No pun intended.

“Was he feeling sick before he left?” Bruce asked.

“Yes,” Jarvis said. “I suggested he may want to sit out, but he was determined.”

“Typical,” Bruce said. “Are you able to reach the team?”

“They are out of range,” Jarvis said.

“Okay,” Bruce said. “Divert non-essential systems to boosting the signal and send out an SOS. Use power from the weapons systems, if you need to. Keep the air conditioning going, we need to cool him down.”

“Yes, sir,” Jarvis said.

Bruce slapped at Tony's cheeks a little, for want of a better way to wake him up. It was hard to shake a man in a metal suit. It would be best to get him out of it, but that was impossible without special tools. They really should put more time into inventing a portable kit. Tony stirred and opened his eyes.

“I'm going to throw up,” he announced, matter-of-factly.

Turning a man in a metal suit to avoid him choking on his vomit was not an easy task, but Bruce managed it. Tony threw up violently.

“So, I guess you caught what Thor had last week,” Bruce said.

“I need to apologize, I teased him for being a wimp,” Tony muttered. “This is hell. There is an alien in my stomach. I want to die.”

“You nearly did,” Bruce said. “Ever heard of a sick day?”

Tony glared at him, hazily. “I thought the whole robot invasion thing was more important,” he said. “Did we win, by the way?” His eyes rolled around. “Where are we?”

“No idea, on both counts,” Bruce said.

Tony's eyes lost focus. Bruce turned him again. Tony threw up again. Bruce decided to leave him on his side.

“I'm sorry,” Tony said. “This isn't dignified. I don't want you to think less of me.”

“You've seen me in a cocktail dress,” Bruce said, with a smile. “I don't think there's any dignity left in our friendship.”

“That was a good look on you,” Tony said. “I mean, I know it was because of the whole naked thing, but if you ever wanted to pursue it as a like, style, I think you could pull it off.”

Bruce rolled his eyes. “Thanks.”
The Writer They Call Tay: IM: Tony Stark is awesomeawanderingbard on February 22nd, 2013 01:25 am (UTC)
Part the Second
Over the next hour, Bruce had Jarvis locate the nearest freshwater stream, and used the broken visor to collect some water for Tony wash his mouth out with, and hydrate him a bit. He threw up three more times. He never shut up in between, his conversation ranging from invention ideas, to deliriums about mermaids, to an excited explanation of a science project that Bruce suspect he thought he was giving to his father. Bruce used some of the water to try to cool him down, but there wasn't much to be done except keep him talking and hope for the best.

Finally, Natasha's voice came through the helmet. “Stark? Come in. Please respond. Banner?”

“That's real, right?” Tony asked. “There's a hot girl talking to me?”

“We're here, Tash,” Bruce said. “We need a--”

Fwoosh! Thor landed on the ground nearby, ruffling the leaves in the trees.

“Hey babe, looking good,” Tony said.

Thor frowned, but seemed to go with it. “Thank you,” he said, seriously.

“He has what you had last week,” Bruce explained.

Thor looked horrified. “That is a foul illness,” he declared. “Are you hurt, Dr. Banner?”

“I'm fine,” Bruce said. “Tony needs some fluids, though--and maybe a CT scan.”

“Hey,” Tony mumbled. “I'm not the one running around naked. Who's really insane, here?”

Bruce grinned. Thor took off again to convey their coordinates to the quinjet. Tony made an accompanying 'whoosh' noise to go with him. The quinjet landed, and Tony and Bruce were brought safely aboard. There was enough First Aid equipment for Bruce to get an IV going in Tony's neck.

“That is gross,” Tony said. “Someone take a picture, this is going on Facebook.”

They flew to the nearest rendezvous point, where they unloaded Tony and received a stern lecture from Steve about safety, and communication, and not being stupid and trying to be a hero.

“Love you, too,” Tony mumbled.

Steve glared at him. “Next time,” he said. “Just take a sick day.”
zee on February 22nd, 2013 03:07 am (UTC)
Re: Part the Second
*bounces up and down* Yay, thank you! Looking forward to Sherlock, below, too.
aelfgyfu_meadaelfgyfu_mead on February 23rd, 2013 02:00 am (UTC)
Re: Part the Second
Go Bruce! At least one of them has some sense. We knew it wouldn't be Tony (and Thor's help only goes so far).

not being stupid and trying to be a hero
Lots of luck with that, Steve!

(From Part 1: "the Other Guys"–"the Other Guys' "
Part 2: "Bruce suspect he">"Bruce suspected he"
I've just been grading papers; I'm even twitchier than usual)
The Writer They Call Tay: Merlin: Thumbs up!awanderingbard on February 23rd, 2013 02:03 am (UTC)
Re: Part the Second
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I rather like Bruce's POV. You've probably noticed my affinity for medical personnal. :-)

*smart salute to Super Beta* I can't edit comments once they've been replied to, but if I repost it anywhere, I'll fix it up. :-D
aelfgyfu_mead: Claymation Sam Tyleraelfgyfu_mead on February 23rd, 2013 02:29 am (UTC)
Re: Part the Second
D'oh! I forgot you couldn't edit comments!
The Writer They Call Tayawanderingbard on February 23rd, 2013 02:30 am (UTC)
Re: Part the Second
*pats your icon on the head*
zee on February 24th, 2013 05:42 am (UTC)
Re: Part the Second
Ugh, manners fail. In thanking you, above, I forgot to add that I totally enjoyed it. I'm delighted by the mental image of a recently de-Hulked Bruce in a cocktail dress. And Tony greeting Thor with 'Hey babe, looking good' and Thor just rolling with it? Ahahaha. Right you are, Thor. Accept that praise as your due.
The Writer They Call Tay: IM: Tony Stark is awesomeawanderingbard on February 28th, 2013 01:51 am (UTC)
Re: Part the Second
No worries! I assumed you wouldn't have thanked me if you didn't like the story. :-D But thanks very much for the added comment. I'm glad you liked it! It was a great prompt. :-)
The other Weird Alaeron_lanart on February 28th, 2013 10:54 am (UTC)
Re: Part the Second
I love this (have a soft spot for Tony & Bruce fics of any nature) but I think my favourite line has to be Thor's horrified "That is a foul illness," which made me grin like a loon.
The Writer They Call Tay: IM: Tony Stark is awesomeawanderingbard on February 28th, 2013 04:23 pm (UTC)
Re: Part the Second
I love the Science Bros myself. I just think Bruce and Tony have a great frantic vs almost lethargic dynamic that makes them fun to write. I'm glad you enjoyed the story!
shadowfireflame: Sherlockshadowfireflame on February 21st, 2013 03:45 am (UTC)
OMG, please can you do Sherlock being seriously injured in some way (something extreme like being shot or something like that, where he is in danger of dying unless somebody helps him) and John or Lestrade or Mycroft (or all three!) take care of him until help arrives? But, like, the injury isn't Sherlock's fault or the result of his carelessness or anything.

AAAH, SHERLOCK H/C IS MY FAVORITE! Thanks for doing this meme!!!

Edited at 2013-02-21 03:48 am (UTC)
The Writer They Call Tay: SHERLOCK: Mrs Hudson hugglesawanderingbard on February 22nd, 2013 01:13 am (UTC)
Um, I seem to be writing an actual, like, fic for this. So, it might be slightly delayed. Just so you don't think I'm ignoring you! I am the opposite of ignoring you. :-D
shadowfireflame: Sherlockshadowfireflame on February 22nd, 2013 01:32 am (UTC)
OMG, SERIOUSLY!?!?!?!? I can wait forever--please take your time. :DDD Let me know if you need a beta or anything, really (though I'm an American, so I don't know if I'd be much help). *excited*
The Writer They Call Tay: SHERLOCK: Watson's cute noseawanderingbard on February 22nd, 2013 01:34 am (UTC)
Yeah. It won't be ginormously long or anything, but maybe a few thousand words or so. It's too long for comment fic, and I felt like I was stifling it by trying to cut it shorter, if you know what I mean. Thanks for the offer, I shall keep it in mind! :-D
shadowfireflame: Sherlockshadowfireflame on February 22nd, 2013 01:43 am (UTC)
Sounds awesome! :)
The Writer They Call Tay: SHERLOCK: Watson's cute noseawanderingbard on February 25th, 2013 04:21 pm (UTC)
Part The First
Ack! Sorry this took so long. I wanted to resolve it all, but the more I tried to write, the less it seemed to work. So I've ended it where I feel it needs to end, and I think it's closer to what you asked for anyway, but it's not as long as I thought it would be. But be reassured that Sherlock will be fine, and the culprit will be found and everything is all happy and lovely now!

Warnings for quite a lot of blood. Not gorey just... a lot of it.

Cold Blood

John stood outside the Barbican Centre, having just spent a few hours listening to the London Symphony Orchestra perform Shostakovich's Violin Concerto No 1 and Tchaikovsky’s Fifth Symphony. He had been informed it was very good, but he had no frame of reference. He wasn't even supposed to be there.

Sherlock had got the tickets for Mrs Hudson, who had mentioned a few times that she'd never been to a 'proper' concert. In one of those surprising shows of consideration, he'd given her a pair of tickets for Mothering Sunday (after John pointed out they really should get her something). She'd asked Sherlock to come with her, but, unfortunately, she'd developed a bad cold and couldn't attend. She was very distressed at the idea of them going to waste, so John volunteered to go to placate her. Also unfortunately, Mycroft was in attendance, and he and Sherlock had spent the whole lead up to the performance furiously texting each other from across the theatre.

Now they were arguing about whether or not Mycroft had come on purpose to try to spy on Sherlock, or whether it had been a coincidence. Mycroft pointed out that, as they were raised in the same household, it made sense that he might enjoy the same music as Sherlock. Sherlock countered that Mycroft hadn't been to see the LSO in years, and wasn't it convenient he'd chosen to attend that night? John couldn't decide which one was the truth. He just hoped Mycroft's car came around soon to take him away.

When the red dot appeared on Sherlock's chest, John was a moment too late in realizing what was going on. By the time he'd made the connection, Sherlock was already on the ground, and even then it looked like he'd just lost his footing. He seemed to think the same thing, as he immediately tried to get up, his legs going out from under him halfway. He looked down to the puddle of blood growing on the pavement, and then up at John, his eyes widening in alarm.

“Vatican cameos!” he said.

They'd chosen that phrase because it couldn't mean anything but what it was. It couldn't be accidentally said in a conversation; it couldn't be mistaken for something else. It just meant duck—and John did. A bullet shattered the glass doors behind him.

All this took only a few seconds, and John was still getting his bearings. Mycroft's security detail had him tackled to the ground, and there were surprised screams from other concert-goers. John crawled along to Sherlock, but was held back by one of the security people, who dragged him into the building instead. Someone forced Mycroft in, and another was half-carrying Sherlock.

John crawled again, this time unhindered. Mycroft was trying to wrestle off the security detail, barking orders for phone calls to be made and the area to be cleared. There was blood everywhere: on Sherlock, on the tiled floor, on the security man, and soon on John as he tried to locate the source of it.

He looked around for something vaguely sterile to cover his hands. He remembered Sherlock kept plastic baggies in his coat pocket in case he needed to steal evidence. He fished them out, and stuck each of his hands in one, before continuing his search for the wound.

“Sniper. Must... be... at the far end of his range,” Sherlock mumbled. “Didn't... hear the shots fired. Did you?” John shook his head. “Obviously... a professional. I was... moving, so... hard shot. Must have been... startled. Odd place to hit and I'm not... dead.”

“Don't move, Sherlock, I'm trying to find the wound,” John said. “Lie still.”

“Are you...listening?” Sherlock said, urgently. “You need... to remember. Someone should write it down. I don't...don't want the irony of my own murder going unsolved because... because I wasn't there to solve it.”
The Writer They Call Tay: SHERLOCK: Sherlock cameoawanderingbard on February 25th, 2013 04:21 pm (UTC)
Part the Second
“You aren't going to die,” John said. “You're going to be fine. So long as you keep still and let me work. Stop being morbid.”

There was too much blood to find the source. It was pouring out, draining from Sherlock's face and leaving his skin an eerie grey, and his hands ice cold. John ripped open Sherlock's jacket, buttons popping off. He could tell where he'd been hit now, but it was still hard to make out the exact wound. From the way it was pumping out, John guess the bullet had nicked an artery. It didn't look like a through-and-through, but John didn't want to roll Sherlock to look for an exit wound to make sure. The pressure from the floor would be stemming any bleeding somewhat, anyway.

“You sound... calm,” Sherlock said. His voice was weak. “Must be bad. You always...always sound calm when you're scared.”

“That's good, Sherlock, keep deducing,” John encouraged. “Keep talking to me. Just don't move around too much.” He turned briefly to yell over his shoulder. “Someone get me something to raise his legs!”

Mycroft arrived a few moments later, sliding a couple of pillows from one of the couches in the lobby under Sherlock's feet, and kneeling down beside him. “Was that actually meant for you or for me, I wonder?” he asked.

“Me, I think,” Sherlock said. "And shooting at John... was an afterthought."

“I agree,” Mycroft said. A bit of worry had crept into his studiously calm voice now. “You were the main target. Ambulance is on its way, and I've phoned your inspector. I've sent someone up to find the sniper. The roof on the right, do you think?”

“Yes... judging from... angle,” Sherlock said.

John finally found the hole, and stuck another bag over it, then used Sherlock's scarf to apply firm pressure. Sherlock groaned, but John couldn't afford to be gentle. The bullet had definitely hit an artery—maybe the right subclavian, somewhere along his upper rib. John hoped it hadn't hit the lung as well. It was hard to tell if Sherlock's panting was from shock, or because was finding it hard to get air. At least it wasn't near his heart.

“Thirsty,” Sherlock said.

“I know,” John said. “It's the shock. I can't give you anything to drink, sorry.”

“I'm not... in shock,” Sherlock said.

“Loosen his belt,” John ordered Mycroft. “And put your coat over him. We need to keep him warm.”

“I'm not... cold,” Sherlock said, through chattering teeth. The fingers on one of his hands danced restlessly. John used that hand to monitor his pulse, and keep him still. Sherlock grabbed John's wrist, in a sort of instinctive movement. His grip was weak.

Mycroft followed John's orders. Then he put his hand on the top of Sherlock's head, pressing down the curls in a sort of ruffling motion. It was a practised movement, as though he'd done it many times before. It made John picture them as children, big brother comforting little one. Or maybe a father comforting a child. Sherlock didn't even complain.

“I thought the violas were off,” Mycroft said, conversationally.

“It was... was a... cello,” Sherlock replied, in a matching, if weakened tone. “The one with the... the...”

“Alcholic husband?” Mycroft suggested.

“Yes,” Sherlock agreed. “Probably... no time... to tune it up. She... was late because... her child... er...”

“Her husband missed picking up her child, yes,” Mycroft said.

Mycroft kept this conversation going, Sherlock's deductions growing more and more incoherent, and Mycroft managing to pick them up and carry on. John wasn't sure if Sherlock knew who was he speaking to any more, or what he was saying.

John kept pressure on Sherlock's chest, and monitored his vitals. There was nothing much else to do. Sherlock was agitated and anxious, and kept asking for water.

The ambulance arrived and the security detail escorted the paramedics in.

“GSW to upper right chest, profuse bleeding—suspected damage to artery, pressure applied for the last five minutes,” John rattled off to the first one he saw. “Patient is in hypovolemic shock, tachycardic, tachypnoeic, slow capillary response, decreased level of consciousness.” He took a breath and added, “I'm a doctor.”
The Writer They Call Tay: SHERLOCK: Watson's cute noseawanderingbard on February 25th, 2013 04:22 pm (UTC)
Part the Third
The paramedics didn't question him. They worked quickly, getting Sherlock up on the trolley. John followed, still applying pressure. It was best to keep it constant--even the few seconds it would take to swap with someone else was a few seconds too long by this point.

John went in the ambulance with Sherlock. He was unconscious now. John was surprised he'd managed to keep awake as long as he had. The paramedic got an IV going—wide open for maximum infusion—and put a non-rebreather mask on him. His sats were in his boots, and the paramedic noticed diminished breath sound on the right. She aspirated his lung. His sats rose slightly.

The attending at the A&E was someone John knew from medical school—somebody Campbell; he couldn't remember his first name. He'd been ahead of him; a resident whom John had trained under. He seemed to recognize John, but it wasn't really the time for 'oh hey, what have you been up to for the last fifteen years?'. They just exchanged nods.

John knew Campbell was good, and felt a bit comforted by that. Sherlock was transferred to the bed, and his clothes were cut off. John was still applying pressure.

“All right, you can remove your hand,” Campbell said. John didn't move. “Please, remove your hand.” John couldn't move. “Watson? We're going to take care of him. I promise. You've done a great job. It's our turn now. Move your hand.”

John stopped applying pressure. He was turned and escorted from the room by a nurse. He moved sluggishly, and without purpose. He was led to a curtain to be checked over for shock. He started trembling all over, and he couldn't catch his breath. That zone he entered when he was doing trauma—the high of the moment and fending off death—melted away. Now it was just his best friend, fighting for his life, while John waited, unable to do anything more.
shadowfireflame: Sherlockshadowfireflame on February 26th, 2013 01:04 am (UTC)
Re: Part the Third
AAAAH, OMG OMG THIS IS SO GOOD. I’m seriously, like, shaking because it’s so good that I feel like I’m going into shock like Sherlock. The medical language is fantastic! When John was trying to get everything in and then had that little moment and then went “I’m a doctor,” I totally squeed. Of course you are, John.

Lots of blood in a story = always a good thing. :) (I feel so bad for wanting Sherlock to be tortured; I really do feel awful. But I love him so much that I can’t help it...I’m so glad hurt/comfort is a thing.)

The premise is sooo sweet, Sherlock getting tickets for Mrs. Hudson for Mothering Sunday, awww.

And Mycroft! Thanks so much for writing such a brilliant Mycroft here.

Now they were arguing about whether or not Mycroft had come on purpose to try to spy on Sherlock, or whether it had been a coincidence.

Yesss, Sherlock’s paranoia about Mycroft’s influence over his life comes to the front. Of course, I’m convinced Mycroft saw that Sherlock was going and wanted to have a little family time together doing something they both enjoy, even if they’re across the theater from one another. It’s their way of bonding. And “furiously texting,” ahaha. God, I’m such a sucker for those two. <3

He seemed to think the same thing, as he immediately tried to get up, his legs going out from under him halfway.

Ohhhh, God, you know how to pull at the heartstrings. Brilliant line. And it’s really adorable and moving how Sherlock is shot and then warns John to get down and protect himself (good advice, as it turns out!). That shows how much he cares for John right there.

“I'm not... cold,” Sherlock said, through chattering teeth.

Oh, Sherlock. <3

What I love best is how understated John and Mycroft’s worry is—you are such a master at showing instead of telling, seriously. John not being able to move his hand to stop applying pressure, Mycroft keeping Sherlock talking in such a completely calm way even though he must be going out of his mind with worry for his brother—all of that shines through so strongly. Plus, looking at this from Sherlock’s perspective for a bit, Sherlock grabbing John’s wrist and allowing Mycroft to ruffle his hair (!!! my favorite moment, right there) shows his shock and anxiety so well, omg. MY HEART!

This is totally the best thing ever. Thank you a million times for writing such a fantastic story in such a short amount of time!!!

EDIT: Oh, and please if you have time and would like to, could you please post this to your AO3 account so I can share the love/have a copy for my kindle? It's an incredible story. :)

Edited at 2013-02-26 01:23 am (UTC)
The Writer They Call Tay: SHERLOCK: Mrs Hudson hugglesawanderingbard on February 26th, 2013 01:26 am (UTC)
Re: Part the Third
My goodness! What a very lovely comment! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I did have a lot more written, but the more I wrote, the more I realized I'd already told the story. I'm glad it worked for you. I really, really loved the prompt, as I love writing doctors being doctors, and emergency medical procedures.

I'll upload it for you right now, if you'd like. I have plenty of time at the moment. I'll mark it as a gift to you, so you can find it easily.

Thanks for being so enthusiastic! :-D
shadowfireflame: Sherlockshadowfireflame on February 26th, 2013 01:45 am (UTC)
Re: Part the Third
Ooooh, yay, thanks so very much! :D
The other Weird Al: minisherlock - frood john towelaeron_lanart on February 28th, 2013 10:58 am (UTC)
Re: Part the Third
Eeee! Love love love Doctor John. All of it is great (I have a soft spot for Sherlock h/c unsurprisingly) but I think the bit that makes it for me and ties it all up is John's post-trauma adrenaline crash and going from doctor to friend.
The Writer They Call Tay: SHERLOCK: Sherlock shockawanderingbard on February 28th, 2013 04:22 pm (UTC)
Re: Part the Third
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I love writing Doctor John. I hope at some point the show gives him something more to do than check pulses and look concerned. It would be nice to see him being awesome in action and Sherlock being impressed, for a change of pace. Thanks so much for comment!